Wednesday, 14 January 2015

Five Sentence Fiction - Healing

The new Five Sentence Fiction is up and I don't want to miss out on linking my story up this week, so I am being quick off the mark. I knew immediately what I wanted to write when I saw this picture, although a bit fiddly fitting it into five sentences. Hope it works.



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Ariel saw Puck stumble as they ran through the forest, his head crashing into a tree root as he went down. Fortunately the leaves and other undergrowth covered him from their pursuers, and she ducked down behind a nearby bush to hide too.



When she was sure they had passed, she crawled over to Puck, her heart now beating from fear for his life, rather than their pursuit. His eyes were still closed, and she could see the blood trickling from the cut in his head as she moved her hands over it, hovering just above like her grandmother had taught her.



The light glowed immediately and she felt it run through her; hopefully he would come round soon and they could find a safer journey home. 



16 comments :

  1. It's an amazing story, I love it.

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  2. Sounds like part of a bigger story! Which you should share, of course!

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    1. Thanks - it could be....I would have to think about it - A LOT! I do snippets of fantasy well, but not so great on expanding!

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  3. Very well told. Would love to read more.

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  4. Keen to see who they're being chased by! Yep, definitely part of a bigger story, Miranda! x

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    1. Thanks Lisa. I had no thought in my head about 'who' their pursuers were LOL - that's why I love snippets! ;)

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  5. The chase, the pursuers, the injuries.. Sure looks to be a thriller of a story. Hoping to read even more. Well done :).

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  6. Who are the pursuers? I need to know!! You have me gripped, asking for more than five sentences :) !!

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    1. Sorry Vidya, I didn't even get that far in my head to know! LOL

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  7. very well written! Give us more! Blessings!

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  8. It's always good to have a healer with you on dangerous travels. I enjoy this story, Well done!

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