Wednesday, 13 February 2013

Love Bites Blog Hop

I was delighted to have been invited to enter a new Flash Fiction challenge in aid of Valentine's day, hosted by my fellow writing buddy and Nano Teammate Laura Jamez, called the Love Bites Blog Hop.  Interestingly, it's an 'Anti-Valentine's Day' theme. So a chance to air the darker thoughts on Valentine's Day. 



Here's what I came up with - enjoy!
 

Lissa threw her head back and laughed. The more she laughed the harder it became to stop; she clutched her middle and rocked back on the sofa, letting it out. It felt good initially, but then it changed. She felt the tears come and her breathing begin to hitch, along with a deep ache in her stomach that reflected the pain in her heart. 

During this outburst Lissa kept a firm grip on the Valentine’s card that had sparked it, and as she calmed down she brought it into focus. Inside were the words he had penned thinking they would bring her back into the fold: “You’ve always been the only one for me.” The only one he kept returning to more like! The only one who’d have him! The other six had wised up! 

She started tearing the heart shape into pieces; first into four, and then into tiny red, glittery bits. She watched them float to the floor, thinking ‘the heart isn’t just broken, it’s bleeding’. This sparked an idea. She smiled. Then she popped to the bathroom to check she still had one, and she did, new in the packet lying next to the adrenaline kit. She picked it up and turned it over in her hands. 

He would drop by tonight, she knew that; rose in hand. What was it? An arrow through the heart? Well this might be a bit smaller, but that meant less detectable. 

Lissa started laughing again. 

(245 Words)




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22 comments :

  1. Oh yes, this is good. Perfect entry and great writing.

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  2. I can see her laughing, the bitterness and building fury...he's got it coming! Loved it!

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  3. Revenge. The perfect antidote to heart-shaped cakes, cards and slop. I am so loving this meme.
    I am with your girl all the way!

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  4. Wow. Sure is a lot of mean in there, ain't there? Holy smokies, but I never saw this one coming. Having fun, adding to my understanding of life. (:

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    1. Bitter? me? ( ; > The saying says it "There's no wrath like a woman scorned."

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  5. I feel like Brad Pitt in Seven: WHAT'S IN THE BOX?!

    What is she going give him?! And what's up with the other six?! So many great questions that only make the story all the more creepier. Love it!

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    1. What is thinner than an arrow, and can be used to give an adrenaline shot?? ( ; > He is juggling 6 women it turns out!

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  6. Never cross a hysterical and bitter woman especially if you are a SIX timing man! Ooooh he deserves what he gets for treating her like a doormat!

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  7. I LOVE the controlled fury in this piece!!! That man definitely deserves what he's getting!! Awesome entry, Miranda!! xo

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  8. No words......okay maybe a few. This entertained me so much. My mouth fell open at the ending. I loved it!

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  9. Glad you all liked it. Sometimes I just can't help myself! Mmmmwahhahahah

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  10. Great! I loved the imagery of the bleeding heart!!

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  11. I was wondering if the "a bit smaller" than an arrow referred to something else... ;)

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  12. What a a loser! 6 timing . . . he deserves everything he gets. . . Brilliant story writing; I love the description of her pain and anguish, turning to revenge; a revenge that his card brought. . .karma. Fab entry. xx

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  13. Oooh, man... he's gonna get quite the Valentine's surprise.

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  14. Eek...murder in time for Valentine's. Something something a woman scorned. Very evocative and sinister. :)

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  15. Great stuff straight to the heart!

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  16. He wouldn't show up if he knew what was good for him! Great story :)

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  17. Those are some fantastic images you evoke here... very effective and wickedly funny.

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  18. Thanks everyone! Feedback is just addictive!

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  19. So many complex emotions in one nugget—and that's exactly how attraction/rejection/desire really feels! Well done

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