The wonderful Meg McNulty has come up with a wonderful idea for a Flash Fiction Contest over on her site From Darcy to Dionysus, and I could not resist when I found this first picture on the Pinterst Board dedicated to it. (There was another, that will be coming soon).
Enjoy!
Elizabeth hadn’t expected to be invited, so when the postman rang the doorbell her stomach lept at the sight of the envelope; the gold filigree giving away the contents. But when he produced a parcel from another sender, she was a little puzzled.
The shoes were a perfect fit as she twirled around the lounge
trying them out, remembering the steps she had learnt at the academy. Then a
question came into her head and she stopped mid step, how did they know her
size as well as the colour?
Everyone at the academy knew purple was her favourite
colour, there was no mystery there, but her shoe size was different; she could
only think of a handful of people that might.
These thoughts slowed Elizabeth’s
preparations, but not her excitement as she donned her petite tulle-bottomed
dress that evening. The ballet shoes set it off perfectly, and she left her
hair down to help the mask obscure her face.
As the taxi pulled away, leaving her at the steps to the great hall, butterflies took flight in her stomach. But she donned the mask, taking courage from its anonymity and joined the others making their way inside.
Feelings of apprehension were soon forgotten when Elizabeth found everyone inside was as concealed as she was. A sense of freedom took over as she agreed to dance upon dance with men she could only guess the identity of, due to speaking while dancing being strictly forbidden.
But then there was one who whispered in her ear and almost
caused her to lose her footing. “Are they comfortable? I knew they’d look
beautiful on your dainty feet.”
Elizabeth
could only study the eyes and mouth of her masked dance partner; the hard black
lines of intricate inlaid spirals obscuring most of his face and giving nothing
away.
At the end of the dance he let her go without a word, moving away to engage with other guests. She stood bereft, still not recognising his manner, although there his carriage and stance were familiar. Who was he?
The next couple of dances she may as well have been floating
for all the presence she gave her suitor; her mind gone, searching for a further
clue to the identity of the man behind the black mask.
It was only during a dance where they had to change partners
and he appeared in front of her again, that she returned. She searched his face
with intent and curiosity and he smiled, whispering again, “I’ve always been
here, you just never saw me before.”
And that was it; she knew and laughed out loud, letting him
swing her round faster. And then, at the end, he swept her into his arms and
she met his lips for a kiss.
499 Words
A mystery resolved, and yet no answer. Nice way to keep me thinking about the character in the story.
ReplyDeleteI love how we are left wondering how he was, yet happy that she knows who it is. Really enjoyed the flow of this, breaking it down into little segments was perfect :)
ReplyDeleteLike the others really pleased she guessed and we don't know, lovely touch! I could feel her tension and then her relief!
ReplyDeleteStrangely I didn't intend to leave the reader hanging - must be all that suspense I read! LOL
DeleteHe was someone who was a friend at the academy, and who she didn't take a second look at until he was masked - play on the whole mask theme - she never saw him UNTIL he was masked! (;>
Lovely :) It reminds me of internet dating in reverse... Behind a computer screen, charming and enigmatic, in real life: dull. Heh!
ReplyDeleteI love that you've taken a theme of masks REVEALING - which I truly believe can happen. It's sometimes only then that people can really be themselves. Her excitement is palpable!
ReplyDeleteGah! I am dying to know who this guy was -- and how he knew so much! It must be a strange feeling to know someone will be able to identify YOU at a masque, because they gave you a piece of your costume, but you won't have the foggiest clue who they are, going in. It's like an intimate secret, shared between lovers.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your play on the masks. And the picture caught my eye too. So beautiful!
ReplyDelete"She donned the mask, took courage in its anonymity." I love this line, and it genuinely resonated with me. Sometimes masks DO give us courage & allow us to blend into a sea of souls & let us be observers, no longer constrained by our former fears. And as your charming story pointed out, they ironically allow us to "see" in others what we never percieved before (hence the attraction of your story!). I really enjoyed how your story evoked all these themes in a deceptively simple way—yet the ramifications are endless. : )
ReplyDeleteI really want to know who he is, name and all, but at the same time I love that I don't. Love the expression "...may as well have been floating"
ReplyDeleteI noticed the picture as well, I have a similar one in pink, haven't worn it though.
As Meg says, it's very cool that you used the prompt to explore what masks reveal rather than what they hide. A tale full of mystery and romance--very nicely done!
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