Wednesday, 14 January 2015

Five Sentence Fiction - Healing

The new Five Sentence Fiction is up and I don't want to miss out on linking my story up this week, so I am being quick off the mark. I knew immediately what I wanted to write when I saw this picture, although a bit fiddly fitting it into five sentences. Hope it works.



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Ariel saw Puck stumble as they ran through the forest, his head crashing into a tree root as he went down. Fortunately the leaves and other undergrowth covered him from their pursuers, and she ducked down behind a nearby bush to hide too.



When she was sure they had passed, she crawled over to Puck, her heart now beating from fear for his life, rather than their pursuit. His eyes were still closed, and she could see the blood trickling from the cut in his head as she moved her hands over it, hovering just above like her grandmother had taught her.



The light glowed immediately and she felt it run through her; hopefully he would come round soon and they could find a safer journey home. 



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12 comments :

  1. Ranu 80214 January 2015 at 23:11

    It's an amazing story, I love it.

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  2. K R Smith15 January 2015 at 02:45

    Sounds like part of a bigger story! Which you should share, of course!

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    1. Miranda Kate15 January 2015 at 12:56

      Thanks - it could be....I would have to think about it - A LOT! I do snippets of fantasy well, but not so great on expanding!

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  3. Anonymous16 January 2015 at 07:45

    Very well told. Would love to read more.

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  4. Lisa Shambrook16 January 2015 at 15:30

    Keen to see who they're being chased by! Yep, definitely part of a bigger story, Miranda! x

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    1. Miranda Kate16 January 2015 at 20:13

      Thanks Lisa. I had no thought in my head about 'who' their pursuers were LOL - that's why I love snippets! ;)

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  5. Aseem17 January 2015 at 00:06

    The chase, the pursuers, the injuries.. Sure looks to be a thriller of a story. Hoping to read even more. Well done :).

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  6. Unknown17 January 2015 at 10:32

    Who are the pursuers? I need to know!! You have me gripped, asking for more than five sentences :) !!

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    1. Miranda Kate17 January 2015 at 16:05

      Sorry Vidya, I didn't even get that far in my head to know! LOL

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  7. Claudia H. Blanton18 January 2015 at 20:07

    very well written! Give us more! Blessings!

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  8. glynis rankin19 January 2015 at 02:37

    It's always good to have a healer with you on dangerous travels. I enjoy this story, Well done!

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