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Carnies
She’d been so excited; her and her best
friend Marie getting ready to go to the fair. Depeche Mode, People are People,
12 inch vinyl on full blast in Marie’s bedroom. Hair, make-up – the works. It would only be there a few days, so they
wanted to make the most of it.
She still remembered the butterflies seeing
him standing there between the cars of the Waltzer, spinning them faster and
faster, making the girls inside scream. He’d laughed as he’d watched them. She
couldn’t wait to be one of those girls and have his eyes on her too.
He hadn’t looked much older than her, only
a couple of years, sixteen or seventeen maybe. His dark golden tanned skin from
working outside had aged him a little. His dark hair and complexion off set by violet
blue eyes that caught you like lightening and drew you in. They’d made her
stomach jump every time they’d rested on hers, which ended up being quite often.
He hadn’t just laughed when he’d spun their
car faster, he’d hung on and winked and chatted, asking her out, asking her to
meet him on his break. She hadn’t hesitated.
And there’d been no time for lots of dates
and getting to know each other, he’d only be there for a few days; they’d spent
their time exploring each other’s mouths and upper bodies behind some the rides
and caravans.
He’d wanted her to go further, but she hadn’t
been ready. How she regretted that now.
Now? She was bought out of her reverie to
look at the view in front of her. It hadn’t changed for decades, except for the
undergrowth slowly taking it over. No one had dared to touch it after what had
happened that last night.
She’d rushed along that night, having
wasted time buying a special present. If only she had been earlier – even five
minutes earlier – he might not have been there, he might not have been anywhere
near where the cars had landed.
They hadn’t been the Waltzer cars – he hadn’t
been working on them that night, he’d been covering for his friend on the Meteorite.
If he’d been on the Waltzer he might have stood a better chance. No, he’d been
working on a ride that had sat directly opposite the Octopus, so when a couple
of its arms had worked loose he’d been in full view.
She wondered if he’d seen it happen,
watched it in the slow painful way that disasters seem to unfold, as it had for
her when she’d arrived on the scene to witness the devastation: the smashed and
broken rides, the fires, the screaming people, the chaos, and blood ... so much
blood.
And she’d rushed to what had remained of
the Waltzers, and he hadn’t been there. And she’d run from ride to ride, hoping
to see him, hoping to hear him, hoping that he’d be alive somewhere and trying
to help others.
But he hadn’t been. He’d been crushed under
the weight of a car that had worked free of the arm as it had collapsed, landing
squarely across the Meteorite. They’d said he wouldn’t have suffered; they’d
said it had been instant.
A tear rolled down her face. The abandoned
twisted remnants in front of her stood as memorial of that fated night. There was
talk from time to time of cleaning it up and putting a proper stone monument
in, but no one wanted to face it; too much had been lost that night; too much
of the town was buried here.
The Bumper Cars
ReplyDeleteIt wasn’t the “Summer of ’69.” It was 1972. She didn’t know I existed, I thought, until she rammed me with her bumper car on a school outing. I mean, I was of course hopelessly in love with her and had been since tenth grade. I would have said “she wouldn’t give me the time of day” except I didn’t know that phrase and I wouldn’t have known what it meant if I did.
Then she hit me with a yellow bumper car. And laughed about it and about my incompetent efforts to turn so I could do the same to her.
I’d forgotten all about that. It was, what?, almost fifty years ago. Still, when she laughs, she displays the impish grin she first sent in my direction that afternoon.
I reminded her of it when we saw the news and the picture of the remnants of Playland, which was about to be razed.
“Of course I remember it. You’re an old fool now, but you were a young fool then.” She kissed my forehead. “It was the only way I could get your attention.”
So sweet. ^_^
DeleteVery good, Terry.
DeleteLove that it worked out for him.
DeleteI like your story. Funny how we both--I never read yours first--went back to high school memories.
ReplyDeleteThanks. It's like I waa back there - well the first part. 😁
DeleteWhoa, I should have known a you starting a story out so sweetly was bound to take a turn.
ReplyDeleteOf course. Horror writer at heart. 😉
DeleteVery good story, Miranda. loved it from start to finish.
ReplyDeleteThanks Mason.
DeleteI needed more words for this one. However her is my story Jerry's Ride hope you like it.
ReplyDeleteYou still did an excellent job. Good story.
DeleteThank you, Miranda.
DeleteLove this image... but, wow did it turn dark on me: Don't Cry Yet
ReplyDeleteWow, that was terrifying, yet perfectly written.
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