Sunday, 28 April 2013

Five Sentence Fiction - Shadows

Lillie McFerrin Writes
 
Lillie McFerrin's Weekly Flash Fiction Prompt - 'Shadows'
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  And this is where it took me:
 
As Lindsay walked across the bridge to work she saw him walking towards her in the opposite direction and immediately looked to see if it would happened again; if it did, this would be the fourth morning in a row, and although on the previous three she’d managed to convince herself that it must be a trick of the light - was it?

The sun was cutting across the bridge and her head was down looking in the direction the shadows would fall, waiting for his to appear as they crossed paths.

She spotted it straight away due to how prominent the horns were, and she glanced up at him to make sure they weren’t really there in the flesh, just as she had done every other morning that week.

But this time their eyes met and he smiled at her, forcing her to give a fleeting smile back before returning her gaze back to his shadow.

She was so lost in wondering how it was possible, she didn’t notice that the shadow was no longer moving away from hers, until a hand slipped round her waist and a low guttural voice whispered in her ear, “If you like them that much, we could find a way to get you a pair too.”


6 comments :

  1. Scary when the devil is smiling at you! I like the tension and confusion of the character in this. There are a couple of small edits you've missed but I enjoyed this Miranda :))

    Five Sentence Fiction is a great vehicle for trying ideas and different points of view, isn't it? I always learn something when I try this challenge!

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  2. Thanks Jo,

    Downfall of posting late and night with tired eyes. I have made corrections/changes, hopefully it reads better.

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  3. The devil is always watching us! Good story!

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  4. You capture an event so very well. Very creative interpretation of the prompt.

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  5. Very imaginative entry. I enjoyed reading it.

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  6. Your mind went to a dark place there. Well done!

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