She thumped her fist against the rock face, frustrated that
it wouldn’t budge; she was tired of standing out on this precipice with nowhere
to go, desperate for salvation.
She had hoped and prayed and begged for a door to appear; it
didn’t matter where it led to, as long as it got her out of here, out of this
empty nothingness overlooking an abyss she’d almost fallen into once already.
She could see the outline cut into the rock, but it was
barely a centimetre deep.
She screamed in frustration, knowing it meant there was
still work to do, that she still had to wait, that it wasn’t time yet.
She stamped her foot and chided herself; if only she’d taken
a different path, there might have been a door waiting for her.
Love this Miranda. Powerful stuff x
ReplyDeleteThanks Susi!
DeleteGreat sense of peril and I love your opening sentence! Like Susi said: powerful.
ReplyDeleteGreat Piece!
ReplyDeleteLove this piece, the desperation, danger and fading hope in a gripping read. x
ReplyDeleteLove this, as Lizzie said the desperation shone through, poor soul, hope she doesn't have long to wait.
ReplyDelete"she was tired of standing out on this precipice with nowhere to go, desperate for salvation" and "that she still had to wait, that it wasn’t time yet". AWESOME!!!!
ReplyDeleteD.B. McNicol
Romance & Mystery...writing my life
Great read :-)
ReplyDeleteWow, thanks for all your comments, I'm glad you liked it.
ReplyDeleteI could feel her frustration and helplessness! Great piece! Aditi
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